Revising Roundup
1 What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3? (2) The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary. (3) This is a shelter for homeless animals.
A The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, this is a shelter for homeless animals.
B The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary and a shelter for homeless animals.
C The officers, who took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, had a shelter for homeless animals.
D The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.
D The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.
39 What change needs to be made in sentence 33?
(33) The ones who did said things like “Cool glasses” and “Wow, you look good in those!
A Change said to say
B Insert a period after glasses
Change Wow to wow
D Insert quotation marks after the exclamation point
D Insert quotation marks after the exclamation point
What is the Best revision for sentence 5
WEIRRD
We drink coffee every morning
simple
Change is to was
usage
2 Joe did not maintain a consistent point of view in the first paragraph of this paper. What revision should he make in sentence 5 to correct this problem? (5) The day she arrived at the sanctuary, caked in mud and terrified of you, no one could have guessed what she would become.
F Change she arrived to the dog arrived
G Change you to humans
h Change no one to they
J Change she would become to it would become
G Change you to humans
34 What change needs to be made in sentence 10?
F Change Mom to mom
G Change the comma to a period
h Change asked to ask
J No change needs to be made.
(10) Instead of telling my Mom, I asked the teacher to move me to the front of the room.
What change should be made to sentence 3?
CUPS
They got there early, and they got really good seats.
Compound
Change Meow Cat Palace to meow cat palace
Capitalization
3 Joe wants to provide a better closing for the second paragraph (sentences 6–10). Which of these could be added after sentence 10 to more effectively close this paragraph? (6) The workers at the sanctuary named the dog Jasmine and nursed her back to health. (7) Eventually she grew strong and learned to trust people again. (8) Soon the staff noticed that she had a real knack for mothering. (9) When a pair of tiny puppies showed up at the shelter, Jasmine took an immediate interest in them. (10) She trotted up to the pups, carried them both to a comfortable spot, and began caring for them as if they were her own.
A People thought Jasmine was a very strange and unique dog.
B The staff was afraid that Jasmine might accidentally harm the puppies.
C She took care of them as if she had given birth to them herself.
D At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.
D At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.
32 What is the correct way to write sentence 4?
(4) That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like, I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
F That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. And was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
G That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
h That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. Because I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
J The sentence is written correctly in the paper.
G That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
What is the most effective way to revise sentence 32?
WEIRRD
She returned the computer after she noticed it was damaged.
Complex A
change suprise to surprised
spelling
4 Joe would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 14?
(13) She also cared for badger cubs, fox cubs, baby guinea pigs, and even baby birds. (14) One of her most unusual adoptees was an 11-week-old fawn that had been found alone in a field. (15) The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and by Jasmine’s gentle care.
F According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.
G Clearly, the fawn was just a little baby at 11 weeks old.
h Jasmine preferred to take care of animals that were similar to her.
J Bunnies, badgers, guinea pigs, birds, and fawns—Jasmine cared for a strange mix of animals.
F According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.
33 How should sentence 7 be changed?
(7) But when I realized I was having trouble seeing the board at school, my heart sinked.
A Change board to bored
B Change the comma to a semicolon
C Change sinked to sank
D Sentence 7 should not be changed.
C Change sinked to sank
8 What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?
WEIRRD
Because my coffee was too cold, I heated it in the microwave.
Complex B
add quotation marks before says
punctuation
5 What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?
(15) The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and by Jasmine’s gentle care
A The animals at the sanctuary were comforted when Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care comforted them.
B The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care.
C The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, who had her loving presence and her gentle care.
D The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, her loving presence, and her gentle care.
B The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care.
40 What change should be made in sentence 35? (35) I couldn’t hardly believe it!
F Change couldn’t to could’nt
G Delete hardly
h Change believe to beleive
J No change should be made in sentence 35.
G Delete hardly
How should sentence 14 be changed?
CUPS
Though Mitchell prefers watching romantic films, he rented the latest spy thriller, and he enjoyed it very much.
compound complex
usage