Revising 1
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 18?
(18) The burrows are more than just pathways that the goannas for laying eggs dig to safe nests.
A. The burrows are more than just pathways to safe nests for laying eggs that the goannas dig.
B. The burrows that the goannas dig are more than just pathways to safe nests for laying eggs.
C. The burrows are more than just pathways to safe nests for laying eggs.
D. No change is needed.
B. The burrows that the goannas dig are more than just pathways to safe nests for laying eggs.
What change needs to be made in sentence 6?
(6) While screen time has benefits, Experts say that too much of it is bad for kids.
A. Change has to have
B. Change the commas after benefits to a period
C. Change Experts to experts
D. Change it to them
C. Change Experts to experts
Judson has included a sentence that does not belong in the first paragraph (sentences 1-6). Which sentence should he remove from this paragraph?
(1) To most people my treasure chest wouldn't seem to contain much actual treasure. (2) It is brown and made of a sturdy wood. (3) In fact, it might appear to be just a box full of rocks. (4) Few people would see anything special about them. (5) But to me those rocks are of incomparable value. (6) The real riches are in the stories that each rock has to tell.
A. Sentence 2
B. Sentence 3
C. Sentence 4
D. Sentence 6
A. Sentence 2
What change needs to be made in sentence 3?
(3) While Jake started playing sports, she made football and basketball cookies.
A. Change While to When
B. Change started to starts
C. Change she to we
D. Insert a comma after football
A. Change While to When
Aiden wants to use a more appropriate phrase than a super dry in sentence 15. Which phrase should replace a super dry in this sentence?
(15) The weather in Australia goes through a super dry, hot season every year.
A. an intensely dry
B. an ordinarily dry
C. an excellently dry
D. an admirably dry
A. an intensely dry
What change needs to be made in sentence 3?
(1) Many kids today spend time in front of screens. (2) Research shows that some is actually focusing on screens at as early as six months old. (3) By the time they reach their teens, they may be spending as much as seven hours a day, in front of screens.
A. Change By to From
B. Change reach to reached
C. Change their to there
D. Delete the commas after day
D. Delete the commas after day
Judson has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 14. Which phrase should replace "In the meantime" in the sentence?
(13) I catalog the rocks based on where they are from, and I'm starting to get quite a geographical assortment. (14) In the meantime, I've personally collected rocks from 10 different states. (15) Other people have collected rocks for me too.
A. In the end
B. Without a doubt
C. In addition
D. So far
D. So far
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 8?
(6) Jake walked in and stared at Nana's kitchen counter. (7) He didn't see any of her usual masterpieces. (8) Instead, the counter was filled with empty pans, boxes of ingredients, bowls of icing, and several unfamiliar gadgets.
A. Change Instead to Likewise
B. Change boxes to boxes'
C. Change several to sevaral
D. No change is needed
D. No change is needed
What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 22?
(22) Other lizards and also insect and snakes and scorpions were found in goanna burrows.
A. Other lizards were found in goanna burrows and also insects, snakes, and scorpions were in the burrows.
B. Other lizards were found in goanna burrows, including insects, snakes, and scorpions.
C. Others were found, including lizards, insects, and snakes, and in the goanna burrows with scorpions.
D. Other lizards, insects, snakes, and scorpions were found in goanna burrows.
D. Other lizards, insects, snakes, and scorpions were found in goanna burrows.
What change needs to be made in sentence 2?
(1) Many kids today spend time in front of screens. (2) Research shows that some is actually focusing on screens at as early as six months old. (3) By the time they reach their teens, they may be spending as much as seven hours a day, in front of screens.
A. Change shows to shown
B. Change is actually focusing to are actually focusing
C. Change early to earley
D. Change months to month's
B. Change is actually focusing to are actually focusing
What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 25?
(25) There's a smooth river rock that I saved from my grandma's garden before she moved.
A. There's a smooth river rock that I saved before she moved from my grandma's garden.
B. There's a smooth river rock from my grandma's garden that I saved from her garden before she moved.
C. There's a smooth river rock that I saved from my grandma and her garden before she moved.
D. No change is needed.
D. No change is needed.
What change is needed in sentence 5?
(5) Sometimes they elect leaders to repersent them, and sometimes they make the decisions themselves.
A. Change elect to had elected
B. Change repersent to represent
C. Delete the comma after them
D. Change themselves to themself
B. Change repersent to represent
Simone has included a sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 8-11) that repeats information. Which sentence should be removed from this paragraph?
(8) I slumped in my chair, highly disinterested in this challenge. (9) I was not the least bit interested. (10) My mind was replaying the last 24 hours. (11) During my baseball game the night before, I had hurt my wrist, and the doctor had told me exactly what I hadn't wanted to hear.
A. Sentence 8
B. Sentence 9
C. Sentence 10
D. Sentence 11
B. Sentence 9
What change needs to be made in sentence 5?
(5) And the seven-hour estimate doesn't even acount for the times that teens spend using screens for schoolwork.
A. Change doesn't to don't
B. Change acount to account
C. Change for the time to of the time
D. Change schoolwork to school work
B. Change acount to account
Judson wants to combine the ideas in sentences 17 and 18. Write a new sentence that combines these ideas in a clear and effective way.
(17) My cousin sent me a Petoskey stone from Lake Michigan. (18) He is from Chicago.
My cousin, from Chicago, sent me a Petoskey stone from Lake Michigan.
Select the response that corrects the error in sentence 4.
His sister ______________ the band, and Nana made tuba cookies.
(4) His sister joins the band, and Nana made tuba cookies.
A. has joined
B. joined
C. is joining
D. will join
B. joined
Simone wants to combine the ideas in sentences 24 and 25. Write a sentence that combines these ideas in a clear and effective way.
(24) The next day, I busily looked for things to include. (25) I noticed how much I actually had to be grateful for.
The next day, as I busily looked for things to include, I noticed how much I actually had to be grateful for.
The next day, I busily looked for things to include and noticed how much I actually had to be grateful for.
What change needs to be made in sentence 8?
(8) The people who showed up to vote on a particular issue was known as the Assembly.
A. Change who to whom
B. Change showed to shown
C. Change particular to particuler
D. Change was known to were known
D. Change was known to were known
Which sentence should replace sentence 32 to bring this story to a more effective close?
(29) Some of my rocks are special to me because of where they came from. (30) Others are meaningful because of what they look like or the connections that they represent. (31) My treasures might not be worth a lot of money, but each stone is like a little piece of my history. (32) And my history is important to me even if it's not so important to others.
A. So I encourage everyone to start a collection of rocks like I have.
B. The rocks represent my story, which makes my collection priceless.
C. It doesn't matter what people collect, as long as they enjoy doing it.
D. Treasures are important regardless of what they are actually worth.
B. The rocks represent my story, which makes my collection priceless.
Sentence 9 is written incorrectly. Select the response that corrects this sentence.
(9) There was also the Council, this group was responsible for day-to-day decisions.
There was also _____________ responsible for day-to-day decisions.
A. the Council, a group
B. the Council. A group
C. the Council. Which was a group
D. the Council, being a group
A. the Council, a group