Wordiness &Run-Ons
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The puppy that was a dog wagged his tail really rapidly was super joyful and happy
What is the happy puppy wagged his tail?
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The cafeteria was messy, noisy, and it was crowded.
What is The cafeteria was messy, noisy, and crowded?
A group of words without a subject or a verb
What is a phrase?
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I learned grammar today, I had so much fun.
What is a comma splice?
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the road To el dorado (film)
What is The Road to El Dorado?
OR
What is The Road to el Dorado?
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The beautiful, majestic, breath-taking city of Rome was visited by many tourists from America during the hot summer.
What is: Many American tourists visit the beautiful city of Rome in the summer?
Name the verb type:
I love fishing, skiing, and biking.
What are gerunds?
Clauses are a group of words with...
What is a subject and a verb?
OR
What is a noun and a verb?
Absolute phrases are this
What is a sentence that starts with a noun/pronoun + ing/ed form of a verb?
OR
What is a noun + participle +optional modifier(s) + and/or object(s)?
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How many of you have read edgar allEn Poe's short story The Cask of Amontillado?
What is:
How many of you have read Edgar Allen Poe's short story "The Cask of Amontillado"?
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Carl enjoys his minor course.
What is there is no error?
Parallel structures are also considered these
What are syntax and style?
An incomplete thought
What is a fragment?
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"It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen." --1984 by George Orwell
What is on a bright cold day in April, the clocks struck thirteen?
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Yaa Gyasi wrote the novel Homegoing in 2016.
What is there is no error?
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Sign-in was at 12 midnight each and every Saturday.
What is Sign-in was at midnight every Saturday?
Underline the incorrect item
The salesman said the car was fast, sporty, and didn't use a lot of gas.
What is didn't use a lot of gas?
Active Voice, Active Voice, Active Voice
Gerund, Gerund, Gerund
PP, PP, PP
Adj, Adj, Adj
Infinitive verb, Infinitive verb, Infinitive verb
What is parallel structure?
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The family devoured Aunt Lenora's carrot cake, their fingers scraping the leftover frosting from the plates.
What is an absolute phrase?
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I enjoyed reading the chapter At flourish And blotts in "Harry potter and the Chamber of secrets"
What is I enjoyed reading the chapter "At Flourish and Blotts" in Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets?
Name two ways to eliminate wordiness
What are omitting fluff/nonessential information and making writing clear/concise?
OR
What are omitting extra adjectives and unnecessary modifiers?
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Clara not only wants money but also fame.
What is Clara wants not only money but also fame?
OR
What is Clara not only wants money but also wants fame?
Run on sentences are constructed of
What are two independent clauses combined without any conjunctions/punctuation to separate them?
Name the sentence type(s) and fix it
I learned grammar today I had so much fun, I got to learn about absolute phrases and clauses and conjunctions.
What is a run-on sentence and a comma splice?
What is I learned grammar today, and I had so much fun. I got to learn about absolute phrases, clauses, and conjunctions.
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The music video for the hit single Sugar, We're Going Down off of fall out boy's 2005 album "from under The cork tree" was filmed in the Catskills.
(Bonus points if you put it in active voice!)
What is The song "Sugar, We're Going Down" off of Fall Out Boy's 2005 album From Under the Cork Tree was filmed in the Catskills.
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What is Fall Out Boy filmed the music video for their hit single "Sugar, We're Going Down" off of their album From Under the Cork Tree in the Catskills?