Commas
The invention is light, durable and compact.
The invention is light, durable, and compact.
This is first sentence in the introduction paragraph.
The attention-grabbing hook
Your researching and writing about the Great War.
You're researching and writing about the Great War.
At the end of the war much of Europe was in ruins.
At the end of the war, much of Europe was in ruins.
calamitous
disastrous
He led the troops and they captured the city.
He led the troops, and they captured the city.
This is the first sentence in the conclusion paragraph.
The restated thesis.
Their was hesitation in the Senate to approve Wilson's plan.
There was hesitation in the Senate to approve Wilson's plan.
When the war ended a celebration occurred.
Wnen the war ended, a celebration occurred.
apathetic
not feeling any strong emotion; not caring
She researched her paper, and then created her Works Cited page.
She researched her paper and then created her Works Cited page.
This explains what the paragraph is about.
Topic sentence
American wanted to keep it's neutrality at the beginning of the war.
American wanted to keep its neutrality at the beginning of the war.
Germany was punished, after the war was over.
Germany was punished after the war was over.
haggard
looking worn, the expression of someone who is suffering
The war ended on November 11, 1918 and this day was celebrated as Armistice Day.
The war ended on November 11, 1918, and this day was celebrated as Armistice Day.
This is the number of topics in each paragraph.
One!
Italy was part of the "Allied Powers" to.
Italy was part of the "Allied Powers" too.
Wilson who was president crafted a treaty.
Wilson, who was president, crafted a treaty.
arduous
very difficult, laborious
Wow what a lot of research information there is on WWI!
Wow, what a lot of research information there is on WWI!
The essay clincher should reflect this.
The attention-grabbing hook.
The Great War had devastating affects.
The Great War had devastating effects.
Sinking the Lusitania, was one action that angered Americans.
Sinking the Lusitania was one action that angered Americans.
prodigious
great, enormous, monumental