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Swords flashing our heroes dashed into action.
Swords flashing, our heroes dashed into action
The museum needs to update it's schedule for the summer.
The museum needs to update its schedule for the summer. It's= It is Its=possessive
A decision was reached by the members to postpone the vote.
The members reached a decision to postpone the vote. Make it active voice.
Of the less popular forms of energy is tidal.
Tidal is one of the less popular forms of energy. Or any answer that fixes the fragment and makes it active voice.
The climbers must reach the summit today or they will have to turn back.
The climbers must reach the summit today, or they will have to turn back.
Rachel is very smart, she began reading when she was three years old.
Rachel is very smart; she began reading when she was three years old OR Rachel is very smart. She began reading when she was three years old. (Fix the comma splice!)
The article was not read by the students.
The students did not read the article. Or any answer that changes the passive voice to active voice.
Often an overlooked "drug" that many don't realize is sugar.
Sugar is a "drug" that many people overlook. Make it active voice!
Aunt Emilia was an impossible demanding guest.
Aunt Emilia was an impossible, demanding guest.
She wore a bicycle helmet on her head that was too large.
She wore a bicycle helmet that was too large for her head. (Or any sentence that clarifies the mispplace modifier "Too large.")
Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of all
When people disobey laws established for everyone's safety, trouble results. Or any sentence that makes it active voice and simplifies the wording.
But it is mostly just a matter of preference, concerning alcohol.
However, alcohol is primarily a matter of preference. Take out the conjunction and replace with a transition word. Fix the wording (make it active).
Your cat watching the dog intently walked carefully away.
Your cat, watching the dog intently, walked carefully away. non-essential clause.
Although the motorcycle hit the tree, it was not damaged.
The motorcycle was not damaged, even though it hit the tree. Or any sentence that clarifies the vague pronoun "it."
The production manager wrote his report quickly, accurately, and in a thorough manner.
The production manager wrote his report quickly, accurately, and thoroughly. Fix the non-parallel construction.
That end being the need to experience other modes of consciousness, drugs just so happen to get the job done.
People have the need to experience other modes of consciousness, and drugs get the job done. Or any sentence that adds a subject, makes it active voice and simplifies the wording.
As a child growing up in Nigeria, my mother taught me to treat all elders with respect.
When I was a child growing up in Nigeria, my mother taught me to treat all elders with respect. Or any correction that fixes the dangling modifier and adds a subject.
Similar to other physiological desires, altering consciousness in among them.
Altering consciousness is one of our physiological desires. Or any answer that fixes the redundancy and simplifies the wording.
In Weil's essay "Why People Take Drugs," he argues that drugs are used in order to satisfy one's desires, and drugs are used to learn and discover certain experiences that the effects of drugs have on oneself.
In his essay "Why People Take Drugs," Weil argues that people use drugs to satisfy their desires and discover new experiences. Or any sentence that gets rid of the redundancies and simplifies the wordiness.