Revising 1
Because Mariah always told them about her day, they were shocked when they didn’t hear from her.
The meaning of the sentence is unclear. What could the writer change to improve the clarity of the sentence?
A. Change they to her parents
B. Change shocked to surprised
C. Change day to it
D. Change always to usually
A. Change they to her parents
We were listening to the radio. Which gave me the idea.
What is the best way to combine the sentences?
A. Although we were listening to the radio I was given the idea.
B. Listening to the radio gave me the idea.
C. Listening to the radio, which we were doing, gave me the idea.
D. Listening to the radio, which is what gave me the idea.
B. Listening to the radio gave me the idea.
It’s important that I listen too my teacher, so I can pass the test.
How should sentence 19 be changed?
A. Change It’s to Its
B. Change too to to
C. Remove the comma after teacher
D. Change teacher to Teacher
B. Change too to to
During the summer, the kids enjoy going to the park with our mom.
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
A Change summer to Summer
B Change kids to kids’
C Change our to their
D The sentence should not be changed.
C Change our to their
You should complete your assignment early if you would like to recieve bonus points.
What change, if any, should be made in the sentence?
Change recieve to receive
You might not know her name. You have likely read some of her literature.
What is the best way to revise the sentence?
A. Although you might not know her name, it is likely that you have read some of her literature.
B. You might not know her name and you have read some of her literature.
C. You have likely read some of her literature, not knowing her name.
D. You have likely not known her name and read some of her literature without knowing her name.
A. Although you might not know her name, it is likely that you have read some of her literature.
The brakes stopped working, Thomas lost control.
What is the best way to revise the sentences?
A. When the brakes stopped working, Thomas lost control.
B. Thomas was losing control, and the brakes stopped working.
C. The brakes stopped working and this is when Thomas was losing control.
D. The brakes stopped working, but Thomas lost control.
A. When the brakes stopped working, Thomas lost control.
Its proven that plenty of rest and a good breakfast will allow students to do their best on a test.
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
A. Change Its to It’s
B. Change plenty to plentie
C. Change their to there
D. Change students to student’s
A. Change Its to It’s
Todays objective is to learn how to revise and edit our own essays.
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
A. Change is to are
B. Change essays to essay’s
C. Change Todays to Today’s
D. Change objective to objetive
C. Change Todays to Today’s
After we learn about compound sentences, we were required to use them in our essay.
What change, if any, should be made in the sentence?
Change learn to learned
When it stopped working, our parents had to buy a new car to take us to school.
The sentence is unclear because the writer has chosen an inappropriate word. What change should the writer make to improve the clarity of the sentence?
A. Change it to the engine
B. Change working to running
C. Change our parents to they
D. Change take to bring
A. Change it to the engine
Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work the two differ in several ways.
What is the best way to revise the sentence?
A. Although Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work, the two differ in several ways.
B. Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work; consequently, the two differ in several ways.
C. Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work; therefore, the two differ in several ways.
D. Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work, so the two activists still differ in several ways.
A. Although Anna Marie is often compared to Leo Tole, another activist of similar work, the two differ in several ways.
“Hey Mom,” Lillie continued “I am going to Anna’s to study for my science exam tomorrow.”
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
A. Change Mom to mom
B. Remove the comma after Mom
C. Add a comma after continued
D. The sentence does not need to be changed.
C. Add a comma after continued
If your teacher asks you to stop talking today, you should stop talking.
How should the sentence be changed?
A. Change your to you’re
B. Remove the comma after today
C. Change asks to asked
D. The sentence should not be changed.
D. The sentence should not be changed.
The researchers discovered that the pizza has more nourishment then the hamburger.
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
Change then to than
These animals have learned to live among the grasses and flowers of the wide open prairie.
The meaning of the sentence is unclear. What could the writer change to improve the clarity of the sentence?
A. Change These animals to Coyote, deer, and bison
B. Change live to survive
C. Change wide to large
D. Change among to around
A. Change These animals to Coyote, deer, and bison
Anna Marie was one of the most famous activists of all time. She started three movements.
What is the best way to combine the sentences?
A. She was one of the most famous activists of all time, she started three movements.
B. She was one of the most famous activists of all time; however, she started three movements.
C. Anna Marie, one of the most famous activists of all time, started three movements.
D. Although Anna Marie was one of the most famous activists of all time, she started three movements.
C. Anna Marie, one of the most famous activists of all time, started three movements.
Reading books and magazines are my favorite activity to do during independent study time.
What change, if any, should be made in the sentence?
Change are to is
After I had experienced Six Flags, I realized that there’s alot more to do than just riding roller coasters.
What change needs to be made in the sentence?
Change alot to a lot
During the student’s presentation, her phone began to ring.
What revision, if any, is needed for the sentence.
The sentence doesn't need to be revised.
Today its memory continues. Reminding us of the great sacrifices that were made for our freedom.
What is the best way to revise the sentence?
A. Today its memory continues; it continues to remind us of the great sacrifices that were made for our freedom.
B. The memory continues today and it reminds us of the great sacrifices that were made for our freedom.
C. Reminding of us of great sacrifices that were made for our freedom is when the memory continues.
D. Today its memory continues, reminding us of the great sacrifices that were made for our freedom.
D. Today its memory continues, reminding us of the great sacrifices that were made for our freedom.
You don’t want to get bit by this deadly spider. It has poison oozing from its fangs.
What is the best way to combine the sentences?
A. You don’t want to get bit by this deadly spider, it has poison oozing from its fangs.
B. Although it has poison oozing from its fangs, you don’t want to get bit by this deadly spider.
C. You don’t want to get bit by this deadly spider, for it has poison oozing from its fangs.
D. When this spider is deadly, it has fangs with poison oozing from them.
C. You don’t want to get bit by this deadly spider, for it has poison oozing from its fangs.
When I went to tutorials, my teacher explained how to use apostrophes and I finally understood.
What change needs to be made in the sentence?
Add a comma after apostrophes
A person can sense when there is more then the usual amount of danger near.
What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?
Change then to than
Each day, I observe the animals. Looking for signs of pain or discomfort.
What is the best way to revise the sentence?
A. Each day, I observe the animals for signs of pain or discomfort.
B. Each day, I observe the animals, for signs of pain or discomfort.
C. Each day, I observe the animals; for signs of pain or discomfort.
D. Each day I observe the animals for signs of pain or discomfort.
A. Each day, I observe the animals for signs of pain or discomfort.