Details
Monica wants to add another detail to help build the ideas in the second paragraph (sentences 8–12). Which of these could follow sentence 10 and add to the main idea of this paragraph?
(8) People have been interested in rhinoceros horns for centuries. (9) Ancient Persians thought that these horns could detect poisons. (10) In Yemen the horns have been used to make the handle of special daggers that are given to boys when they become men. (11) All over the world people have found uses for the rhino horn. (12) As a result, the rhinoceros has become one of the world’s most endangered animals.
A larger
B taller
C stricter
D easier
A larger
B taller
C stricter
D easier
Maggie wants a better ending for her paper. Which sentence can be added after sentence 22 to bring this paper to a more effective close?
The Rhino’s Horn
(13) Because of the rhino’s status as endangered, it’s against the law to kill one. (14) But to get a rhino horn, some people ignore this law. (15) The number of rhinos has dropped drastically. (16) In fact, the rhino population has decreased by about 90 percent in the last 40 years. (17) There are now only about 30,000 remaining in the world. (18) It is uncertain whether the rhinoceros will survive as a species. (19) However, many people care about these animals and want to stop the illegal trade of rhino horns. (20) Governments are trying to write bigger laws to protect the rhinos. (21) Conservation organizations are working to make people aware of the problem. (22) Several zoos are developing breeding programs to increase the number of these animals.
F With the combined efforts of many people, it’s quite possible that the amazing rhinoceros will be saved from extinction.
G If the breeding programs work, there will be more rhinos in zoos soon.
H Finally, the rhinoceros that so many people love will survive, and it will probably be around for years to come.
J And that will be the end of the worries about rhinos.
F With the combined efforts of many people, it’s quite possible that the amazing rhinoceros will be saved from extinction.
G If the breeding programs work, there will be more rhinos in zoos soon.
H Finally, the rhinoceros that so many people love will survive, and it will probably be around for years to come.
J And that will be the end of the worries about rhinos.
What is the BEST transition to add to the beginning of sentence 15?
(13) Because of the rhino’s status as endangered, it’s against the law to kill one. (14) But to get a rhino horn, some people ignore this law. (15) The number of rhinos has dropped drastically. (16) In fact, the rhino population has decreased by about 90 percent in the last 40 years.
F In the beginning
G In addition
H As a result
J However
F In the beginning
G In addition
H As a result
J However
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?
(8) He had a favorite book. (9) It was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
F He had a favorite book, since it was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
G He had a favorite book and Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
H His favorite book was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
J He had a favorite book it was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
F He had a favorite book, since it was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
G He had a favorite book and Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
H His favorite book was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
J He had a favorite book it was Judy Blume’s Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
The word bigger is not the right word for sentence 20. Which word should replace bigger in this sentence?
(20) Governments are trying to write bigger laws to protect the rhinos. (21) Conservation organizations are working to make people aware of the problem. (22) Several zoos are developing breeding programs to increase the number of these animals.
A larger
B taller
C stricter
D easier
A larger
B taller
C stricter
D easier
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 20?
(20) All the while it was a regular kid he had been thinking of a story about.
A All the while a regular kid had been thinking about a story.
B All the while he had been thinking of a story about a regular kid.
C All the while he had been thinking about a regular kid and a story.
D All the while he had been thinking of a story it was about a regular kid.
A All the while a regular kid had been thinking about a story.
B All the while he had been thinking of a story about a regular kid.
C All the while he had been thinking about a regular kid and a story.
D All the while he had been thinking of a story it was about a regular kid.
Which of these could follow sentence 5 and effectively state the central idea of this paper?
Jeff Kinney Creates a Wimpy Kid
(1) Sometimes a person has to make a slight turn in life. (2) With effort and some luck, an idea can take the person in a wonderful new direction. (3) That’s what happened to Jeff Kinney. (4) He is the creator of the fiction series Diary of a Wimpy Kid. (5) Millions of kids have read Kinney’s books and seen movies based on them.
A Kinney’s life story is a perfect example of a turn in life leading to great things.
B Kinney wrote the books in the Diary of a Wimpy Kid series and some movies have been made.
C Kinney had an interesting childhood and an even more interesting adulthood is what I think.
D Kinney is a person that you should like a lot, and I am going to tell you why in this paper.
A Kinney’s life story is a perfect example of a turn in life leading to great things.
B Kinney wrote the books in the Diary of a Wimpy Kid series and some movies have been made.
C Kinney had an interesting childhood and an even more interesting adulthood is what I think.
D Kinney is a person that you should like a lot, and I am going to tell you why in this paper.
Roland needs to use a more appropriate transition at the beginning of sentence 8. Which of the following should replace For example?
(7) Hedgehogs, or hedgies as some people call them, are affectionate, and they form strong bonds with their owners. (8) For example, it’s important not to frighten a hedgehog, especially when it’s still getting to know you. (9) If it feels threatened, it might stick you Page 11 GO ON with its quills. (10) But once a hedgehog considers you a friend, it will become a perfect companion.
A Therefore
B However
C In fact
D After that
A Therefore
B However
C In fact
D After that
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?
(2) She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness. (3) She skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
A She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, so she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
B She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness because she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
C She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
D She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, and she skips through the introduction, and she gets right to the action.
A She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, so she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
B She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness because she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
C She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.
D She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, and she skips through the introduction, and she gets right to the action.
The meaning of sentence 33 is unclear. It can be clarified by changing it to —
(27) “Lauren!” someone screams. (28) Lauren begins to panic. (29) What will she do? (30) “Lauren!” the voice yells even more urgently. (31) Lauren knows that whoever it is will not reach her in time to save her. (32) The rhino is approaching too fast. (33) Suddenly Lauren feels a stabbing pain in it. (34) The rhino has rammed her! (35) Lauren cries out and doubles over.
F her game
G her shoulder
H the voice
J the rhino
F her game
G her shoulder
H the voice
J the rhino
Mitchell would like to add the following sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 6–12).
(6) She easily catches and returns a frightened koala bear and a small zebra. (7) Then suddenly the screen freezes up. (8) Annoyed, Lauren starts pushing buttons in an attempt to reset the game. (9) As she pushes button after button, she hears a growl. (10) “Wow,” she thinks. (11) “The special effects in this game are so realistic! (12) It not only sounds like an animal is nearby but smells like it!”
Feeling startled, she shakes her head and sits up straight.
Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?
F At the beginning of the paragraph
G After sentence 6
H After sentence 8
J After sentence 9
F At the beginning of the paragraph
G After sentence 6
H After sentence 8
J After sentence 9
Derrick wants to further develop the central idea of this paper by adding a detail after sentence 3. Which of these sentences could BEST follow and support sentence 3?
Pay It Forward
(1) When someone does something nice for you, you probably want to pay that person back. (2) But some people choose to do something different. (3) They’re paying it forward! (4) In the process they hope to become part of a chain of good deeds that will grow and grow.
A Pay it forward today if you have an opportunity to do this.
B That means they’re doing something nice by helping another person who may be in need.
C This is different and not the same as paying someone back.
D I had a friend who helped me when I had to clean out my garage.
A Pay it forward today if you have an opportunity to do this.
B That means they’re doing something nice by helping another person who may be in need.
C This is different and not the same as paying someone back.
D I had a friend who helped me when I had to clean out my garage.
Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 14?
(11) Many years of improvements led to Keds, the first mass-marketed athletic shoes. (12) Not only were Keds comfortable, but they were also very quiet. (13) In fact, the rubber soles made them so quiet that people could sneak up on one another. (14) People were referring to the new shoes as sneakers, and the name stuck.
F For example
G However
H Soon
J In conclusion
F For example
G However
H Soon
J In conclusion
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 24 and 25?
(24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face.
F Since he made his way steadily down with a grin, it began to spread over his face.
G He made his way steadily down because a grin began to spread over his face.
H As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.
J He made his way steadily down a grin began to spread over his face.
F Since he made his way steadily down with a grin, it began to spread over his face.
G He made his way steadily down because a grin began to spread over his face.
H As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.
J He made his way steadily down a grin began to spread over his face.
Derrick has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 10. Derrick should change As a result to —
(5) The idea to “pay it forward” became popular in 2000 after a movie with the same title came out. (6) But the concept is at least as old as Ben Franklin. (7) In 1784 he helped a man by giving him some money. (8) Afterward he wrote the man a letter. (9) He told the man that he didn’t want to be paid back. (10) As a result, he wanted the man to help someone who needed money in the future.
F To conclude
G For example
H Instead
J In other words
F To conclude
G For example
H Instead
J In other words
Mitchell wants to help readers move from the fourth paragraph (sentences 16–23) to the fifth paragraph (sentences 24–26). Which sentence or sentences should Mitchell insert at the beginning of the fifth paragraph, just before sentence 24?
(24) She turns sharply and sees a huge rhinoceros charging toward her. (25) Its head is lowered, and its large horn is aimed directly at her. (26) As the animal gets closer, Lauren reaches for her pack but then remembers that she has already used her net.
A It’s a rhinoceros! Oh, no!
B Uh-oh! Another animal is just around the corner.
C Then Lauren hears a stomp and a huff.
D The tiger is trapped and won’t be going anywhere.
A It’s a rhinoceros! Oh, no!
B Uh-oh! Another animal is just around the corner.
C Then Lauren hears a stomp and a huff.
D The tiger is trapped and won’t be going anywhere.
The central idea of Roland’s paper is weak. Which of the following could replace sentence 3 and provide a better central idea for this paper?
Hedgies
(1) Are you thinking about getting a new pet? (2) Would you like to try something a little different? (3) Get a hedgehog.
A For my paper I would like to tell you that you should definitely and for sure get a hedgehog this time.
B Everyone likes to try different things, so this time don’t do the same thing again and get a hedgehog.
C Instead of choosing a traditional pet, such as a dog, a cat, or a guinea pig, you might want to get a hedgehog.
D Because you would like to try something that isn’t very normal, get a hedgehog.
A For my paper I would like to tell you that you should definitely and for sure get a hedgehog this time.
B Everyone likes to try different things, so this time don’t do the same thing again and get a hedgehog.
C Instead of choosing a traditional pet, such as a dog, a cat, or a guinea pig, you might want to get a hedgehog.
D Because you would like to try something that isn’t very normal, get a hedgehog.
Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 23?
(22) Subway Cat and I never got very close to each other after that. (23) Over time we formed a sort of friendship. (24) I would stare at him. (25) He would stare at me. (26) Sometimes, as he was leaving the train, he would turn back, proudly flick his tail, and meow. (27) Our simple relationship continued until, one Wednesday, he just wasn’t there.
A Yet
B In the same way
C For example
D Therefore
A Yet
B In the same way
C For example
D Therefore
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 6 and 7?
(6) Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils. (7) He would then give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
A Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils, which he would then give to his friends as gifts.
B Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils, he would then give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
C Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils after he would give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
D Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils that would then give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
A Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils, which he would then give to his friends as gifts.
B Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils, he would then give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
C Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils after he would give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
D Ghetti learned how to carve his friends’ names into pencils that would then give the pencils to his friends as gifts.
The meaning of sentence 12 is unclear. What change can Claire make to improve the clarity of this sentence?
(12) He was at the top of the cliff with him, saying something about how strong the rope was.
F Change He to Another counselor
G Change cliff to spot
H Change him to them
J Change the rope to it
F Change He to Another counselor
G Change cliff to spot
H Change him to them
J Change the rope to it
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 19?
(19) In 2003, at a drive-through coffee shop, the customers set a record and in Connecticut.
A In 2003 the customers set a record in Connecticut, and it was at a drive-through coffee shop, which was there.
B In 2003 the customers at a drive-through coffee shop in Connecticut set a record.
C In 2003, at a drive-through coffee shop, the customers set a record it was in Connecticut.
D In 2003 there were customers at a drive-through coffee shop in Connecticut that set a record at the shop.
A In 2003 the customers set a record in Connecticut, and it was at a drive-through coffee shop, which was there.
B In 2003 the customers at a drive-through coffee shop in Connecticut set a record.
C In 2003, at a drive-through coffee shop, the customers set a record it was in Connecticut.
D In 2003 there were customers at a drive-through coffee shop in Connecticut that set a record at the shop.
Claire’s paper ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering what happens next. Which sentence should Claire add to the end of her paper?
Now or Never
(23) Jared was actually rappelling! (24) He made his way steadily down. (25) A grin began to spread over his face. (26) He went faster and faster until his last step was more like a jump. (27) Jared suddenly realized that he had made it to the bottom. (28) His legs were still a bit shaky as he gave Andrea a high five. (29) But Jared knew exactly what his first words would be now that he had made it down.
F He had made it down and had actually rappelled.
G “Where’s my snack?” he asked the counselors.
H He didn’t have a doubt about what he wanted to say.
J “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.
F He had made it down and had actually rappelled.
G “Where’s my snack?” he asked the counselors.
H He didn’t have a doubt about what he wanted to say.
J “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.
What is the BEST way to combine sentences 9 and 10?
(9) We finished planting. (10) Then we had a tasty picnic at a table we had set up under a tree.
F After we finished planting, we had a tasty picnic at a table we had set up under a tree.
G We finished planting, then we had a tasty picnic at a table we had set up under a tree.
H Finishing planting, we had a picnic at a table we had set up under a tree that was tasty.
J We finished planting and had a tasty picnic it was at a table we had set up under a tree.
F After we finished planting, we had a tasty picnic at a table we had set up under a tree.
G We finished planting, then we had a tasty picnic at a table we had set up under a tree.
H Finishing planting, we had a picnic at a table we had set up under a tree that was tasty.
J We finished planting and had a tasty picnic it was at a table we had set up under a tree.
The word contained is not the right word for sentence 6. Which word would better help describe the outside of the hedgehog?
(6) The outside of a hedgehog is contained with sharp quills, but the underside of this animal is soft and fluffy.
F included
G covered
H wrapped
J colored
F included
G covered
H wrapped
J colored