Revising
What is the difference between revising and editing
Revising asks you to add, remove, move, and substitute-- it is the big moves and changes.
Editing asks you to fix little errors like capitalization, spellings, grammar, and more.
What is a fragment?
an incomplete sentence
What is a simile?
comparing two things using like or as
What is the difference between tone and mood?
tone is the speaker/author's attitude
Mood is the reader's feelings
Who is the high school named after?
Patricia E. Paetow
What is one thing you may remove from an essay when revising it?
Answers may vary: baby words, unnecessary detail, etc.
What is a run-on?
What is a metaphor?
comparing two things without using like or as
What device is being used below:
As dawn's pale face began to show its self, I realized I lost track of time.
Personification
Who is the head principal?
Ms. Dickerson
What are two things you may add when revising an essay?
Answers may vary: add transitions, a thesis, examples to a body paragraph, etc
Fix the sentence:
The affect of the rainy weather was that everyone felt sleepy.
The effect of the rainy weather was that everyone felt sleepy.
What is personification?
giving human characteristics to a non-human object
What two devices are being used below?
My heart is a winding river; it babbles and rages against the stones, shinning a deep blue of isolation.
metaphor and imagery
Who is the 9th grade principal?
Celestine
Revise the thesis to fit the prompt-
Prompt: Write an essay explaining your definition of true friendship.
Thesis: True friendship can be defined by many things.
Answers will vary
Fix the three errors:
When the sun comes up I cannot help but wake up my brother is like this to.
When the sun comes up, I cannot help but wake up. My brother is like this too.
Could be semicolon as well
What is imagery?
appealing to the five sense; creating a picture in the reader's head.
If a story mentions a greek myth or a biblical story, what device is being using?
an allusion
What city is Ms. Thompson from?
MS. Collier's class-- answer:
When was Paetow founded?
Birmingham
2017
Combine the sentences below with a semicolon and appropriate conjunction. You have 1 minute.
I need to set aside time to study. I really struggle with remembering everything I need to accomplish.
I need to set aside time to study; however, I really struggle with remembering everything I need to accomplish.
Fix the five errors:
Although I studied. Their was a since of anxiety in my bones that effected me grately.
What is an allusion?
a reference to a work outside of the original work that creates extra meaning
Create an example of your own metaphor about love. You have 1 minute.
Answers will vary
Ms. Thompson's class: How many siblings does Ms. Thompson have? Older or younger?
Ms. Collier's class: What is the address of the school?
Ms. T: One younger brother
Ms. C: 23111 Stockdick School Rd