"The Spark"
The best way to clarify the meaning of sentence 4 is to change They to--
B. My parents
What is the best way to revise sentence 13?
To use the system, the surgeon makes three or four small incisions in a patient and then inserts stainless-steel rods into the openings.
What transition could most effectively be added to the beginning of sentence 12?
For example
Ben realized that he left the following detail out of the second paragraph (sentences 3–9).
I counted them and realized I was holding more than $200 in cash.
Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?
After sentence 6
Zane needs to use a more appropriate word than tweaks in sentence 18. Which of these words would be the best replacement for tweaks?
manipulates
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 19?
Employers need workers who can communicate in different languages and understand different cultures.
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 18?
The kids in the after-school program made cards for the residents of a retirement center.
Zane wants to add a sentence to the end of the first paragraph (sentences 1–9) to better articulate the thesis of his paper. Consider the paper as a whole, paying careful attention to the first and second paragraphs. Which of the following ideas would best follow sentence 9 and express a controlling idea in this paper?
Robotic surgery, an enhanced form of laparoscopic surgery, offered solutions to some of these problems.
Sentence 4 is a weak attempt at a thesis statement. How can Kate revise this sentence to more clearly establish the thesis of her paper?
Every American teenager should learn at least one other language, for both personal and professional benefit.
Ben wants to add a closing sentence to reinforce the controlling idea of his paper. Which of the following ideas could best follow sentence 25 and help accomplish this goal?
You just have to be willing to pay it forward.
Zane wants to provide more detail in sentence 23. Which of the following could replace sentence 23 and best accomplish this goal?
Could this be a way to provide better medical care to people in rural communities, war zones, or isolated parts of the world?
Kate thinks there is a sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 15–21) that should be deleted. Reread the paragraph. Which sentence, if any, should be deleted from this paragraph?
Sentence 17
The transition from the second paragraph (sentences 3–9) to the third paragraph (sentences 10–15) is weak. Read both paragraphs again. Which sentence could best replace sentence 10 and improve the transition between these two paragraphs?
Soon we began talking about what the note had instructed us to do: pay it forward.
Zane wants to add some questions after sentence 25 to help close this paper. Which of the following could best be added after sentence 25?
But what about 20 or 30 years from now? Could robotics provide treatments that are unheard of today?
What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?
One such study, published in the Journal of Educational Psychology, found that native English speakers in a Spanish immersion program significantly outperformed monolingual English-speaking students on English vocabulary tests.