Edit and Revise 1
Bill, Jill, Bo, Joe, and I are going down to the fair for corndogs
Period at the end
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Can we visit tokyo, Japan when I am older?
Capitalize Tokyo
Francisco was watching television although a commercial for a new video game flashed on his television screen.
The word although does not appropriately connect the two clauses in sentence 1. Which word should replace the word although?
A. While
B. Since
C. When
D. As a result
C. When
Every week Francisco was put in charge of mowing the lawn, washing the dishes, vacuuming the house, and taking the dog for a walk.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?
A. Change vacuuming to vacuming
B. Delete the comma after house
C. Insert a comma after week
D. Make no change
C. Insert a comma after week
Though good at basketball, he was neither tall ___ quick.
a) or
b) and
c) nor
C. nor
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When are we going to visit grandma in florida again?
Capitalize Florida
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"Can we have more apple pie? said John.
Quotes after pie and question mark
He wanted to be the first to get it because he knew it would make him the coolest out of all of his freinds.
What change should be made to sentence 2?
A. Change coolest to cooler
B. Insert a comma before because
C. Change wanted to wants
D. Change freinds to friends
D. Change freinds to friends
Many players have to practice before or after school and have game’s at night and on the weekends.
What change should be made to sentence 3?
A. Insert a comma after school
B. Change many to few
C. Change on to in
D. Change game’s to games
D. Change game’s to games
The poet was long-winded _______ surprisingly interesting.
a) yet
b) and
c) so
A. yet
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She were going to Walmart, but she had a coupon for Target.
Were to Was
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When will he stop trying two cheat on his tests?
two --> to
After begging and pleading with them, they agreed to give him the money for the video game with one condition.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 4?
A. Insert a comma after begging
B. Change begging to beging
C. Change them to her
D. No change is needed
D. No change is needed
If you want to play a sport make sure it is something you really enjoy doing.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 5?
A. Insert a comma after sport
B. Change enjoy to injoy
C. Insert a semicolon after sport
D. No change should be made
A. Insert a comma after sport
One almost has to be super-human to complete the obstacle course. __________, it humbles you.
a) On the other hand
b) Accordingly
c) Nevertheless
b) Accordingly
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Their going to go to work on Thursday and Friday at Taco Bell.
Their to They're
Jennifer try to play with her friends, but they were in quarantine.
try to tried
(3) He ran into his parents’ room and begged for the video game. (4) After begging and pleading with them, they agreed to give him the money for the video game with one condition. (5) Francisco would have to earn it. (6) Every week Francisco was put in charge of mowing the lawn, washing the dishes, vacuuming the house, and taking the dog for a walk. (7) His sister played volleyball. (8) After a month of chores, the day had finally arrived. (9) Francisco had earned enough money for his video game.
Which sentence should be deleted?
A. Sentence 3
B. Sentence 5
C. Sentence 7
D. Sentence 9
C. Sentence 7
Learning how to work with a team, and gaining friendships is the best part about being on a team.
What change should be made to sentence 7?
A. Change learning to learn
B. Delete the comma after team
C. Change a team to an team
D. Change the period to a question mark
B. Delete the comma after team
The class is terribly difficult. ____________, it is terribly popular because of the teacher.
a) Accordingly
b) Curiously
c) Nevertheless
c) Nevertheless
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Billy and i like cinnamon rolls and chocolate milk to.
Capitalize I.
to --> too
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I cant help but notice that the cafeteria food smells good.
apostrophe in can't
As he stood outside and waited for the store to open it was the happiest moment of his life.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 10?
A. Change as to even though
B. Insert a comma after open
C. Change happiest to happier
D. No change is needed
B. Insert a comma after open
Playing a sport can be challenging, but it also has a lot of benefits.
Which transition word would be best at the beginning of sentence 8?
A. In addition
B. Consequently
C. In conclusion
D. Next
C. In conclusion
The math team forgot how to add. _________, they forgot even their own names.
a) In fact
b) As a result
c) Strangely
a) In fact