Combining Sentences
Janet skated onto the pond. She made a perfect figure eight.
What is the best way to combine the two sentences.
Janet skated onto the pond, and she made a perfect figure eight.
(12) Furthermore, we don’t have the technology or experience to establish a successful colony on Mars. (13) Those in favor of a colony insist it can be built using technology that already exists. (14) However, some researchers at the Massachusetts institute of technology disagree. (15) They believe that in order for a person to survive on the red planet for more than 68 days, new technology must be developed.
How should sentence 14 be changed?
F Change researchers to researcher’s
G Change institute of technology to Institute of Technology
H Change disagree to disagreeing
J Sentence 14 should not be changed.
G Change institute of technology to Institute of Technology
Rewrite sentence 9 to be correct.
(9) If we were to set up a colony on Mars, missions to bring additional people and supply’s would take just as long.
(9) If we were to set up a colony on Mars, missions to bring additional people and supplies would take just as long.
(11) The projects students chose were as diverse as the classes that selected them. (12) One class chose to implement a recycling program in the cafeteria. (13) A second class had the highest scores on the midyear science exam. (14) Another class painted a beautiful mural on one of the walls in the school’s entryway. (15) Our class took over the garden that had been planted near the front doors the previous year.
Ari has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 11–15).
Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
F Sentence 12
G Sentence 13
H Sentence 14
J Sentence 15
G Sentence 13
So the next time you feel the feeling to sneeze, grab a tissue and let it go.
Quincy has not used the most effective word for feeling in sentence 30. Rewrite sentencen 30 and include a more appropriate word.
So the next time you feel the urge to sneeze, grab a tissue and let it go.
Combine the two sentences in a clear and effective way.
When he surfaces, he usually has a heavy bag. Filled with hundreds of golf balls that have mistakenly landed in the pond.
When he surfaces, he usually has a heavy bag filled with hundreds of golf balls that have mistakenly landed in the pond.
(1) Oliver had been in the animal shelter for two long weeks. (2) Other dogs had come and gone, but Oliver had never been chosen by a family. (3) Then one day it happened. (4) A mom, a dad, and a little girl named Lauren pointed at him. (5) They took Oliver out of his pen and put him in there car. (6) Oliver was finally on his way to a place he could call home!
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?
F Change took to take
G Insert a comma after pen
H Change there to their
J No change should be made.
H Change there to their
(7) Upcycling is the practice of taking an unwanted item and converting it into something you can use. (8) For example, how about that pair of jeans that has a hole in one knee? (9) It could become a hip new pillow for your bedroom or a potholder for the kitchen. (10) How about the old T-shirts you never wear anymore? (11) It could be stitched together to make a picnic blanket. (12) Or you could turn an old windbreaker into a bag. (13) To carry a swimsuit and towel to the beach.
Rewrite sentence 11 to be correct.
They could be stitched together to make a picnic blanket.
(19) Maggie quickly put her shawl around her shoulders and dashed out into the rain, pressing her body against the wind as she fought her way to the lighthouse. (20) There was no answer to her crazy knocks, so Maggie pushed her way inside. (21) She immediately saw the problem. (22) Captain Frank, huddled in a heap at the bottom of the stairs, had fallen down and broken his leg. (23) Maggie rushed to help him, but he shooed her away.
In sentence 20, Deena did not use the most appropriate word to describe Maggie’s knocks. Which of the following is the best replacement for the word crazy?
A foolish
B outrageous
C frantic
D haphazard
C Frantic
(5) The ordinary sneeze usually begins with a tickle in the nose. (6) Nerve endings pick up the message and send it to a “sneeze center” in the brain. (7) The chest tightens. (8) Air pressure in the lungs increases. (9) The eyes close, and the tongue presses against the roof of the mouth. (10) Suddenly, air shoots out of the nose with a powerful force. (11) “Achoo!” the person says. (12) Some sources claim that the common sneeze may travel at a speed of 100 miles per hour. (13) And once a sneeze is underway, everyone knows that it’s almost impossible to stop
Quincy would like to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 5–13). The sneeze center then takes charge and sends the message to the many muscles that work together to produce a sneeze.
Where should this sentence be inserted?
F After sentence 6
G After sentence 7
H After sentence 9
J After sentence 12
F After sentence 6
What is the best way to combine the two sentences?
But the sudden forward movement of the roller coaster. Makes me realize that it’s too late for second-guessing.
But the sudden forward movement of the roller coaster, makes me realize that it's too late for second-guessing.
(43) That night, and every night after that, Oliver snoozed in the glow of the fish tank. (44) He no longer felt lonely. (45) Mom, dad, and Lauren were upstairs. (46) They would be back in the morning. (47) But for now he had a talkative shrimp, a funny clown fish, and a pretty coral to keep him company. (48) Oliver had found two new families, one for day and another for night.
How should sentence 45 be changed?
F Delete the comma after Mom
G Change dad to Dad
H Change were to was
J No change should be made.
G change dad to Dad
Recycling takes an item made of glass, paper, metal, or plastic, breaks it down to its base material, and then used that material to make another product.
Rewrite the sentence to be correct.
(19) Recycling takes an item made of glass, paper, metal, or plastic, breaks it down to its base material, and then uses that material to make another product.
(23) Why does sleep seem to be an essential part of life for so many kinds of animals? (24) Scientists aren’t sure. (25) However, they aren’t even sure that every species needs sleep. (26) What is certain, though, is that animals that do sleep have found some clever ways to do so and unique.
Derek has not used the most effective transition in sentence 25. Which of the following could replace However in this sentence?
F As a matter of fact
G For example
H To conclude
J In contrast
F As a matter of fact
Rewrite the sentence in a clear and effective way.
All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind, the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, and shrieks of my fellow passengers that are piercing.
All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind, the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, and the piercing shrieks of my fellow passengers.
Combine the two sentences in a clear and effective way.
The brain stem connects your brain to your spinal cord. Which connects to most of the nerves in your body.
It connects your brain to your spinal cord which connects to most of the nerves in your body
(7) Even though Mars is the nearest planet to Earth, it is still millions of miles away. (8) It takes almost nine months for a spaceship to travel there. (9) If we were to set up a colony on Mars, missions to bring additional people and supply’s would take just as long. (10) And if something were to go wrong on the colony, we wouldn’t be able to send help in a timely manner. (11) The planet is simply to far away.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 11?
A Change is to was
B Change simply to simpley
C Change to far to too far
D No change should be made in this sentence.
C Change to far to too far
During the great depression in the 1930s, many families lived on a tight budget.
Rewrite the sentence to be correct.
During the Great Depression in the 1930s, many families lived on a tight budget.
(8) Other animals, such as horses, have the ability to lock their legs. (9) This allows them to remain standing while they’re asleep. (10) If a predator comes near, they can make a quick escape. (11) Horses have bigger eyes than most other animals, too.
Derek has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 8–11). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?
F Sentence 8
G Sentence 9
H Sentence 10
J Sentence 11
J Sentence 11
Rewrite this sentence in an clear and effective way.
Students write essays, take tests, do homework, and sports practices.
Students write essays, take tests, do homework, and attend sports practices.
(10) Then night fell. (11) While the people went upstairs. (12) Oliver was left to sleep downstairs in the basement. (13) Oliver was scared! (14) Where was his family? (15) He didn’t want to be by himself.
Combine sentences 11 and 12 in a clear and effective way.
While the people went upstairs, Oliver was left to sleep downstairs in the basement.
(1) Mars, the red planet, is the fourth planet in our solar system. (2) It is one of Earth’s closest neighbors. (3) For years scientists have wondered whether conditions on Mars might have once been suitable for life. (4) As a result, several unmanned spacecraft have been sent to explore the surface of the planet. (5) Some people think it is now time to send a manned spacecraft to the red planet to set up a colony. (6) Although the idea is certainly intriguing a human colony on Mars is not something the United States should pursue at this time.
What change needs to be made in sentence 6?
A Change Although the idea to The idea
B Insert a comma after intriguing
C Change something to nothing
D No change needs to be made in sentence 6.
B insert a comma after intriguing
(18) The attendant at the shelter took the Bennetts to a line of large cages. (19) “Here’s a nice black Lab that just came in,” she said. (20) The dog jumped up to greet them. (21) Sending bits of fur into the air. (22) Tony patted the dog’s head, but Jenna and her father backed away
Combine sentences 20 and 21 in a clear and effective way.
The dog jumped up to greet them sending bits of fur into the air.
(25) Another research source identifies the longest bout of sneezing. (26) Donna Griffiths earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history, from Worcestershire, England. (27) Beginning in 1981 and ending in 1983, Griffiths sneezed continuously for 978 days!
What is the most effective way to revise sentence 26?
F Donna Griffiths, who earned the Guinness World Record, had the longest sneezing fit in history when she was from Worcestershire, England.
G Donna Griffiths earned the Guinness World Record from Worcestershire, England, for the longest sneezing fit in history.
H Donna Griffiths was from Worcestershire, England, she earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history.
J Donna Griffiths, from Worcestershire, England, earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history.
J Donna Griffiths, from Worcestershire, England, earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history.
Rewrite the following sentence in a clear and effective way.
With regular exercise and the diet was strict, Dudley grew trim and sleek, and he was able to make the first cut.
With regular exercise and a strict diet, Dudley grew trim and sleek, so he was able to make the first cut.