The Empire's Revision
(1) "Hey, Barbara, let's get going," Mom hollered. (2) "The morning is more than half over."
(3) "I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied, she walked slowly into the kitchen.
1. Which sentence could be added after sentence 2 to strengthen the introduction to this story?
A. I think the door needs painting.
B. I am half as old as my brother.
C. In the meantime, our car needs a car wash and some gas.
D. At this rate, it will be August before you ever get out the door.
What is...D. At this rate, it will be August before you ever get out the door.
(9) "I am going to show you how to grow fresh vegetables in a few containers," Mom said. (10) "I are tired of the taste of the vegetables that we have been getting. (11) The ones available from the grosery store are not fresh.
6. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?
A. Change I to me
B. Change are tired to am tired
C. Change from to for
D. No change should be made in this sentence.
What is...B. Change are tired to am tired
(22) Many animals live on or under the North American prairie. (23) Insects crawl around on the grasses and flowers, munching and eating their fill. (24) Small animals feast on the plants, too. (25) Larger predators hunt and live on the smaller animals. (26) Birds eat the insects and seeds. (27) These animals has learned to live among the grasses and flowers of the wide, open prairie.
11. Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 27 to help conclude this story?
F. Furthermore
G. Overall
H. In comparison
J. Later
What is...G. Overall
(27) These animals has learned to live among the grasses and flowers of the wide, open prairie.
16. What change should be made in sentence 27?
A. Change These to Those
B. Change has to have
C. Change learned to learning
D. Change open to opened
What is...B. Change has to have
There are four errors in the sentence below. Can you find, and correct, them all?
you musnt play until after you done your chores
You mustn't play until after you've done your chores.
(28)"Even though I'm exhausted, I'm surprised, I feel pretty good. (29) Okay is the word I'm looking for."
(30) "Yes, me too," Mom said.
2. Nina has used a poor choice of words in sentence 29. She should change Okay to --
A. Sure
B. Neat
C. Proud
D. Up
What is...C. Proud
(4) "I stayed up late working on my science research paper. (5) I weren't finished with my homework. (6) It's due in a week.
7. How should sentence 5 be changed?
F. Change I to you
G. Change weren't finished to wasn't finished
H. Change my to you
J. Sentence 5 should not be changed.
What is...G. Change weren't finished to wasn't finished
(16) Matter is left behind by the dead parts of the plants. (17) These help new plants grow from the old roots.
12. What is the best way to combine sentences 16 and 17?
F. Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants helps new plants grow from the old roots.
G. However, the matter left behind by dead parts of the plants when new plants grow from the old roots.
H. Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants, the matter helps new plants grow from the old roots.
J. As the matter is left behind by dead parts of the plants and new plants grow from the old roots.
What is...F. Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants helps new plants grow from the old roots.
(3) Overhead light streams across a blanket of blue sky all around the horizon.
17. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 3?
A. Add a comma after Overhead
B. Change horizon to horizen
C. Change streams to stream's
D. Sentence 3 does not need to be changed.
What is...A. Add a comma after Overhead
There are five errors in the sentence below. Can you find, and correct, them all?
we like hot whether we always goes to the beach to swim
We like hot weather! We always go to the beach to swim.
(26) "Looks good," Mom said.
(27) "It sure does," Barbara agreed because a smiled moved across her lips. (28) "Even though i'm exhausted, I'm surprised, I feel pretty good."
3. The word because does not appropriately connect the two clauses in sentence 27. Which word should replace the word because?
F. if
G. while
H. although
J. where
What is...G. while
8. What is the correct way to write sentence 3?
A. "I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied as she walked slowly into the kitchen.
B. "I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied, walked slowly into the kitchen.
C. "I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied; walking slowly into the kitchen.
D. I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied as she walked, slowly into the kitchen.
What is...A. "I'm sorry, Mom," Barbara replied as she walked slowly into the kitchen.
(13) Like a speeding race horse fire often rages across the prairie. (14) The tops of any plants in the path of the fire are destroyed, but the roots below ground survive. (15) Roots hold plants to the ground. (16) Matter is left behind by the dead parts of the plants. (17) These help new plants grow from the old roots.
13. Alberto is concerned that there is a sentence in the third paragraph (sentence 13 -17) that doesn't add anything to his paper. Which sentence should Alberto delete from the third paragraph?
A. Sentence 13
B. Sentence 14
C. Sentence 15
D. Sentence 16
E. Sentence 17
What is...C. Sentence 15
(13) Like a speeding race horse fire often rages across the prairie.
18. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 13?
F. Insert a comma after horse
G. Insert a comma after rages
H. Change across to accross
J. No change should be made in sentence 13.
What is...F. Insert a comma after horse
There are seven errors in the sentence below. Can you find, and correct, them all?
snails aphids and mites nibbled on the plants in aunt maybelles garden
Snails, aphids, and mites nibbled on the plants in Aunt Maybelle's garden.
(21) After breakfast, Barbara's mom took her out to the small patio. (22) Barbara followed her mothers directions and slowly they put soil, plant food, and organic nutrients in a bucket as they mixed them all together. (23) Barbara doled out the garden mixture to five round containers and added young plants. (24) Young plants seem to cost more than seeds. (25) Finally, Barbara moved the containers to get the most sunlight during the day and ended the lengthy task by carefully watering each container.
4. Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?
They got right to work.
F. After sentence 21
G. After sentence 22
H. After sentence 23
J. After sentence 24
What is...F. After sentence 21
(10) "I are tired of the taste of the vegetables that we have been getting. (11) The ones available from the grosery store are not fresh. (12) I want and you need fresh veggies.
9. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 11?
F. Change ones to wons
G. Change available to availible
H. Change grosery to grocery
J. Sentence 11 does not need to be changed.
What is...H. Change grosery to grocery
(1) A constant breeze weaves through waves of tall grass stretched for miles in every direction. (2) A few trees dot the landscape like a quick afterthought. (3) Overhead light streams across a blanket of blue sky all around the horizon. (4) From the south end of Texas, threw the middle of parts of the United States, and on up into southern Canada, these prairie lands spread far and wide. (5) One must see to understand its beauty the prairie.
14. What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 5?
A. The prairie that is most beautiful must be seen and be understood.
B. One must see the prairie to understand its beauty.
C. One must understand to see the beauty of the prairie.
D. The prairie must be understood to see its beauty.
What is...B. One must see the prairie to understand its beauty.
(6) The rocky mountains a major mountain range in North America border the prairie on the west.
19. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 6?
A. Change rocky mountains to Rocky Mountains
B. Change prairie to Prairie
C. Change west to West
D. Change the period after west to a question mark.
What is...A. Change rocky mountains to Rocky Mountains
There are eight errors in this sentence. Can you find, and correct, all of them?
cherie whispered i hope he choose me to bee in the play
Cherie thought, "I hope he chooses me to be in the play!"
(30) "Yes, me too," Mom said.
(31) "Can we clean up and get something to cool to drink?" asked Barbara.
5. Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 31 to help conclude this story?
F. Furthermore
G. Later
H. In comparison
J. Now
What is...J. Now
27) "It sure does," Barbara agreed because a smile moved across her lips. (28)"Even though I'm exhausted, I'm surprised, I feel pretty good. (29) Okay is the word I'm looking for."
10. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 28?
A. Change though to tho
B. Change the comma after surprised to a semicolon
C. Change feel to fill
D. Sentence 28 does not need to be changed.
What is...B. Change the comma after surprised to a semicolon
(17) These help new plants grow from the old roots.
(18) The ever present winds distribute seeds all throughout the prairie. (19) These same winds drive the grass fires across the flat lands.
15. Alberto would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 18. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 18?
A. The seeds fall, take root, and grow quickly.
B. The seeds will grow if they make it to the ground.
C. The wind is always blowing on the prairie.
D. It's the consistency of the wind helps the prairie become a better place for plants.
What is...D. It's the consistency of the wind helps the prairie become a better place for plants.
(6) The rocky mountains a major mountain range in North America border the prairie on the west.
20. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 6?
F. Change The to A
G. Insert a comma after rocky
H. Insert a comma after mountains and after America
J. Delete North
What is...H. Insert a comma after mountains and after America
There are ten errors in the sentence below. Can you find, and correct, them all?
prof w c wilson and his wife were born on january 16 1965
Prof. W. C. Wilson, and his wife, were born on January 16th, 1965.