Writing Crimes
Name the 4 Writing Criminals
Run-on Ralph
Fragment Fred
Awkward Arthur
Comma Splice Carl
Correct this:
My sister likes apple and blueberries and she likes strawberries, but she doesn't like strawberry ice cream.
My sister likes apples and blueberries.
She likes strawberries, but she doesn't like strawberry ice cream.
Correct:
I am going camping, I bought all of the ingredients to make smores.
I am going camping, so I bought all of the ingredients to make smores.
Correct this:
The baby kitten.
The baby kitten drank some milk.
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Correct using at least 4 of the words below in your sentence:
doggie ice cream for school lunch
My mom packed me doggie ice cream in my school lunch.
Answers will vary.
What writing crime is Run-on Ralph guilty of?
He says too much in one sentence, he often has 2-3 sentences, he doesn't use fanboys or he uses too many fanboys in one sentence. He needs to seperate his thoughts into simple or compound sentences.
Correct this:
Mike went fishing so he packed his fishing gear he went to the boat docks and fished off the pier.
Mike went fishing, so he packed his fishing gear.
He went to the boat docks and fished off the pier.
Jeffrey lost the $100 bill he had in his pocket, he had a hole in it.
Jeffrey lost the $100 bill he had in his pocket, for he had a hole in it.
Correct this:
having a great time
I am having a great time in school today.
Answers will vary.
Correct this using at least 4 words in your sentence:
shopping like a speeding bullet every week.
My sister shops like a speeding bullet every week.
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What writing crime is Fragment Fred guilty of?
He only writes a piece of a sentence-fragments, he is missing a subject or predicate, or punctuation.
Before you leave make sure you pick up your mess take the garbage out and clean up the garage.
Before you leave, make sure you pick up your mess.
Take out the garbage, and clean up the garage.
Melody wanted to have a sleepover at Carly's house,
she was too scared to go.
Melody wanted to have a sleepover at Carly's house, yet (but) she was too scared to go.
Correct this:
My pet zebra.
My pet zebra loves to eat Oreos.
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Correct using all of the words:
Chris week Cribble Party and Halloween Zoey
a Zeldon had last.
Chris Cribble and Zoey Zeldon had a Halloween Party last week.
What writing crime is Comma Splice Carl guilty of?
he adds a comma to his writing, but never adds the FANBOY to create the compound sentence.
Melvin has a box of toys in his trunk he wants to donate them to charity he has to drop them off tomorrow after school.
Melvin has a box of toys in his trunk, and (so) he wants to donate them to charity.
He has to drop them off tomorrow after school.
My brother doesn't like shrimp, he doesn't like steak.
My brother doesn't like shrimp, nor does he like steak.
Did Captain correct, correct this sentence?
made a big mess
Captain Correct: ed made a big mess last night at the party.
No! Ed made a big mess last night at the party.
Correct using all of the words:
yet he didn't he worked so test pass hard, his
He worked so hard, yet he didn't pass his test.
What writing crime is Awkward Arthur guilty of?
Given an example.
His writing is confusing it makes no sense.
My dog ate a big bone last night he got so sick he threw up all over the house but he never got sick in my room he is such a good boy
My dog ate a big bone last night.
He got so sick he threw up all over the house, but he never got sick in my room.
He is such a good boy.
Join these two simple sentences using the conjunction
"or". Give 2 answers: one using the comma, the second without the comma.
Mr. Lima Bean wants to go hiking.
Mr. Lima Bean wants to go swimming.
Mr. Lima Bean wants to go hiking, or he wants to go swimming.
Mr. Lima Bean wants to go hiking or swimming.
Correct this:
grace giraffe and charlie chicken went
mcdonalds.
Grace Giraffe and Charlie Chicken went to McDonalds for dinner.
Correct using all of the words:
Sara's backyard pet her blue in bird tree flew a
out in it the window, she yet found.
Sara's pet blue bird flew out the window, yet she found it in a tree in her backyard.