Writing

Air Traffic Control

100

QUESTION: Nikki needs to establish a more effective controlling idea in her paper. Which rewrite of sentence 8 can BEST accomplish this goal? (8) They keep you and me safe. A: The nation’s air traffic controllers have to sit in front of computer screens. B: They work day and night to keep millions of air travelers safe. C: With so many planes in the sky, they are critical folks. D: The air traffic controllers are important contributors to the scene.

B: They work day and night to keep millions of air travelers safe.

200

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 13? (13) Controllers on the ground will let you know which runway to use and when it’s your turn to take off. F: Controllers on the ground will let you know which runway to use they’ll also let you know when it’s your turn to take off. G: Controllers on the ground will let you know which runway to use. And when it’s your turn to take off. H: Controllers are on the ground which will let you know which runway to use when it’s your turn to take off. J: Sentence 13 does not need to be revised.

J: Sentence 13 does not need to be revised.

300

Nikki would like to add a phrase to the beginning of sentence 14 to help transition from the third paragraph (sentences 9-13) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 14-17). Which of the following could Nikki add to the beginning of sentence 14 to achieve this goal? (14) A regional controller will begin guiding you in order to ensure that you’re out of the way of other planes in the area. A: Once your plane is in the air B: Before that C: With that in mind D: Over above all else

A: Once your plane is in the air

400

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 16 and 17? F: However, you’ll move from one part of the country to another when you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another. G: As you move from one part of the country to another, you’ll be handed off from one regional center to another. H: You’ll move from one part of the country to another, you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another. J: You’ll move from one part of the country to another after you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another.

G: As you move from one part of the country to another, you’ll be handed off from one regional center to another.

500

What change should be made in sentence 19? (19) There, controllers will be ready to make sure that our plane lands in an orderly fashion. A: Change controllers to guys B: Change ready to prepared C: Change our to your D: Change orderly to good

C: Change our to your

Give Me the City Life

100

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 13? (13) I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed, and then a bike path that takes me straight to the park. A: I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed and straight to the park from a bike path. B: I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed, and then a bike path that takes me straight to the park is there. C: I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed, I can then follow a bike path that takes me straight to the park. D: I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed and then follow a bike path that takes me straight to the park.

D: I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed and then follow a bike path that takes me straight to the park.

200

Justin would like to tell more about the idea he expressed in sentence 21. Which sentence could BEST follow and support sentence 21? (21) The commercial district near our apartment offers restaurants featuring foods from around the world. A: The restaurants offer a variety of foods from so many different places around the globe. B: There are people from every country in the world who live near me now. C: China, Japan, Korea, and Thailand are thousands of miles away from the world I know. D: Once day I can eat a gyro, a type of Greek sandwich, and the next day I can enjoy pho, a Vietnamese noodle soup.

D: Once day I can eat a gyro, a type of Greek sandwich, and the next day I can enjoy pho, a Vietnamese noodle soup.

300

Justin can improve the clarity of sentence 22 by changing it to – (22) Although my apartment home is smaller than the country house, it has expanded in new ways. F: my house G: my world H: the yard J: the food

G: my world

400

Justin has used a poor choice of words in sentence 24. He should change stuff to – (24) City life, however, offers other stuff. A: rituals B: items C: opportunities D: places

C: opportunities